Review

When you are starting to be a teenager at the age of 15 to 18 you want to be the center of attention, the cool (one, and), the popular (one) and have more friends. A lot of teenagers do whatever to feel important although this can give you(them) some health problems. Right now the teenagers smoke, (consume) alcohol consumer and taint his(their) body(bodies) with a tattoo to be more popular in the school. The teenager(teenagers) use the cigarettes for(as) a social tool(,)(;) you can go with a group of your friends that they are smoking(,) (and) to be part of the group you ask for a cigarettes(cigarette) and start to smoke whit(with) them. The problem of the cigarette it’s(is that it) that contains the chemical nicotine that make(makes) you consume more cigarettes and they(then) you will continue smoking and becoming addictive(addicted) to smoke and remember that smoke(smoking) only gives you breathing problems. At this age you will go to a lot of parties and in these parties (there) will be alcohol for(to) drink(,)(.)the alcohol not is(Alcohol is not) bad because it’s a way to share whit(with) your friends, the bad (thing) is if you consume (it) in excess. 

I think that you are developing cigarettes and alcohol and in your topic sentences you said you would develop center of attention, coolness, and popularity.

The alcohol (awry?) the brains messages so you can’t coordinate your body very well, like difficult to move your arms and legs and talk, unconsciousness and dizziness. The alcohol is like the cigarettes you start to drink and they will be difficult to get out of this addiction. Making a tattoo is another way to be cool in your school because you can have in your body your favorite draw, but a tattoo not is just a simple draw in your body the ink that use in your body is permanent, the ink is introduced in your skin and you will never goanna take of only whit laser treatments that are too expensive. Besides of this you will never donate blood in a hospital because you have ink chemicals in your blood. You can be cool in your school making other things like: the best player of soccer or basketball, this is healthy skills. So there are many ways to be the center of attention whit your friends, not only if you smoke, drink alcohol or have a nice tattoo.